4/29/10 I just read lalalahahaha13's story about the mall and, I think that she did a good job at telling it because I was there!!!!!!!! It was soooooooooo funny when they set the volcano in front of her, her face looked funny.(with a crazy look) well it was soooooooooooooooooooooooooooo fun
I am so glad that you three have formed a friendship. It is the best feeling to surprise your friends and make them happy!- Ms. Schwieters
5/5/10 I wish that there were more story's about:
- different parts of the world
-adopted kids and how their life plays out
-kids that go through starvation
on Saturday I broke my foot when I was at my friends house, we went to the park and we were playing tag with her brother and he was running after me so I jumped on the top of the slide and me not wanting to be tagged, freaked out and let go of the bar that I was holding on to and I fell off it and landed on my side and my friend went to get her dad and he brought me to the bike and I pushed of the ground with my good foot. When we got to my friends house, we got some ice on it and waited about twenty minuets and then we went to my grand-parents house and while my grandma was looking at my foot, it started to swell up so we went to the ER at woodwinds and we got a x-ray of it and it turns out that I broke the the middle meta-tarsles in my left foot. I had to get a splint on it first and I was wearing skinny jeans so my grandma started to pick at the seam of the jean because it wouldn't fit over the splint.
When my grandma went to go get some sweats, my grandpa came in and...
You can definitely combine your experience with breaking your foot with your idea about adopted kids. -Ms. Schwieters
How can you develop these ideas into stories? Your theme could be about changing the world.-Ms. Schwieters
5/7/10 cool names
-Min
-Hana
Names are important, but you need to get some traits for your character. What is she experiencing?-Ms. Schwieters
5/10/10 setting: ww2 or Korean war
four of my cousins were adopted from Korea, so I think that I am going to do a story based on them but they were only babys when the left Korea so, I cant ask them what it was like there- wolfgrl
You need to pick a character to develop. Perhaps you need to stay away from your friends when we are working on the computer.-Ms. Schwieters
5/11/10
outside features e inside features
-long black hair
-ivory skin
-5'
-dark brown eyes
-
There needs to be much more. Spend less time on the color of the text. You have a responsibility to get the work done.-Ms. Schwieters
I am so glad that you three have formed a friendship. It is the best feeling to surprise your friends and make them happy!- Ms. Schwieters
5/5/10 I wish that there were more story's about:
- different parts of the world
-adopted kids and how their life plays out
-kids that go through starvation
on Saturday I broke my foot when I was at my friends house, we went to the park and we were playing tag with her brother and he was running after me so I jumped on the top of the slide and me not wanting to be tagged, freaked out and let go of the bar that I was holding on to and I fell off it and landed on my side and my friend went to get her dad and he brought me to the bike and I pushed of the ground with my good foot. When we got to my friends house, we got some ice on it and waited about twenty minuets and then we went to my grand-parents house and while my grandma was looking at my foot, it started to swell up so we went to the ER at woodwinds and we got a x-ray of it and it turns out that I broke the the middle meta-tarsles in my left foot. I had to get a splint on it first and I was wearing skinny jeans so my grandma started to pick at the seam of the jean because it wouldn't fit over the splint.
When my grandma went to go get some sweats, my grandpa came in and...
You can definitely combine your experience with breaking your foot with your idea about adopted kids. -Ms. Schwieters
5/6/10 issues... -homelessness -world hunger -discrimination -segregation -ww2
-immigration
How can you develop these ideas into stories? Your theme could be about changing the world.-Ms. Schwieters
5/7/10 cool names
-Min
-Hana
Names are important, but you need to get some traits for your character. What is she experiencing?-Ms. Schwieters
5/10/10 setting: ww2 or Korean war
four of my cousins were adopted from Korea, so I think that I am going to do a story based on them but they were only babys when the left Korea so, I cant ask them what it was like there- wolfgrl
You need to pick a character to develop. Perhaps you need to stay away from your friends when we are working on the computer.-Ms. Schwieters
5/11/10
outside features e inside features
-long black hair
-ivory skin
-5'
-dark brown eyes
-
There needs to be much more. Spend less time on the color of the text. You have a responsibility to get the work done.-Ms. Schwieters