Recent Changes

-what gets in the way of her getting the horse is her parents don't think she will take care of it
-what gets in the way of her making new friends that like horses are there is no other pepole that like or have horses at her school
-what gets in the way of her making friends is everyone thinks she is an idiot because she loves cows, horses and nascar!

5-4-10
My idea is that hopefully there will be time travel in the future and it's possible because theres a way to time travel it's smaller then a molecule there called Wormholes. There real and scientists think that it's possible! scientists think they may be able to expand a wormhole to human size!
fiction.- Ms. Schwieters
5-5-10
I wish there was a book about history like how the Titanic sunk and how Amelia Earhart flew the Alantic ocean plus how the Civil War started and how it ended plus how World War 2 started and how it ended. Maybe in the future The Great Depression would happen again and maybe 100 years from now it could happen again then another 100 years it could happen again and again and again and maybe it could happen every 100 years for all humanity!!!!!!!!!! I wonder what the Revolutionary war was like?
Linda and Bob were waiting for them to come for 45 minutes from the raging waters of 'The Deadly Gulf Of Mexico'!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
When Bill was pulled to shore by Terence Linda and Bob were so glad that Terence found Bill and they let Terence stay with the Robertson's for a night well unless Terence's parents let him stay over at the Robertson's!!!
Dear Mrs. Schwieters I did NOT get the book club done I know you really want me to finish the book club book and I know it's my assiment and I'll give up my Choice Time or Recces Time or even both and I'll face my punishment!!! I'MM SORRY!!!!!!!!!!

-i feel like I'm keeping the problem throughout the WHOLE story... do you?
-Madison fixes it, a couple years later, when Madison and Claire are both on Dance lines, and Performed their sister duet. "wow Madison! You did a very nice job up their with your sister!" says her family...
SEE THIS?* ^

-Sad because she hardly ever see's her dad, because he has 2 work.
-Is glad that she has a friend now.
DRAFT
Hi my name is Cindy, and this story is about the time I met Mr.Teddy.
It all began 3 years ago, in July.
I was five at the time, and my mother, Clementine, had just bought me a new stuffed animal, Mr.Teddy.
I loved him VERY much!!!!!!!!

Hold on! You are telling the story. What about the character development? You need to tell me who your character really is before you can start in on the story.-Ms.Schwieters
May 11th 2010
Syd'sCindy's Outside features:
-Med Light Blonde
-Short
-Japanese-Mexican,Indian and Canadian
-Darker skin
-Green and Pink finger nails
-Short hair-Small body
-4ft 7in
-Dark blonde highlights
-Orange Toe nails
-Green eyes
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Inside features
-Scared of thunderstorms
-Loves scrapbooking
-Loves SWIMMING!!!
-Loves hunting, But doesnt enjoy gun talk that much though!
-Fearless
-Energetic-Caring
-Loves swimming
-Likes reading
-Dislikes math
-CreativeMr.Teddy
-Loves Mr.Teddy
-Is Sad when she lost M.Teddy
-Glad someone else more deserving got Mr.teddy
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This is a good start. I am concerned that you don't have more. I know you have more in you.-Ms. Schwieters
Outside
-Long dark hair
-5ft 3in
-Light brown eyes
-Light skin
-Mothers face (as some people say)
-Short
-Pink Finger nails
-Light green toe nails
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Inside
-Scared of thunderstorms-Energetic
-Loves scrapbooking
-Loves SWIMMING!!!
-Loves hunting, But doesnt enjoy gun talkswimming
-Likes reading
-Dislikes math
-Creative
-Sad that shes poor
-ALWAYS has a positive additude
-Sad that her mother died
-<3 her dad
-Doesnt Like living in Canada, but has to.
-Sad because she hardly ever see's her dad, because he has 2 work.
-Is glad that much though!
-Fearless
-Caring
-she has a friend now.

feels:mad,destructive,cautious,smart.
looks:pale,still,smart,prepared,vicious.
looks:nervous,scared.
feels:disoriented,smart.
sounds:tough,loud.
looks:battle hardened.
feels:strategic,tired,limp.
sounds:tired,weak,disabled.

Thanks! : )
5-18-10
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~Camille
5-5-10
-Mostly honest (90% of the time)
~Camille
Great start. Keep going. It will help the reader know more about your character. Remember what Mrs. Comisar said about characters being to good to be true. What are her weaknesses?-Ms. Schwieters
5-14-10
(5-11 continued)
-she has an older brother, younger brother, and a younger sister.
-her best friend's name is Ella
Great start. Keep going. It will help the reader know more about your character. Remember what Mrs. Comisar said about characters being to good to be true. What are her weaknesses?-Ms. Schwieters
5-24-10
*Madison is really worried if her Grandpa is going to die*
-she starts feeling very frustrated with her family that they didn't tell Madison that her Grandpa had Cancer
-she thinks to herself: "why does he HAVE to die?!"
-she sees a movie in her head about: her Grandpa in the hospital, and he comes home (but he doesn't)
5-18-10
*when we were doing our scenes today, you told me to kinda change the story. So I'm going to re-tell my summary, OK?...*
Madison, who just tuned 10 made her third Dance line. So when she goes to her 1st competition, all of her family is there. So Madison LOVED the attention she got, from her family cheering her on. So on the 2nd Competition, only her mom shows up to cheer for her, and she was kind of upset. Madison thought that competitions were all about cheering, and the attention (But their not). She was upset, because she was expecting more attention. So, that year, when her little sister, Claire signs up for dance, Claire gets more attention than Madison. Now before Madison tried out for a competition Dance line, she would only perform her dances once a year. But for Competitions, you perform all of your Dances like, 10 different times, so it was a big leap for Madison. Madison gets very frustrated when her sister gets more attention than Madison does, when she performs. (Also, her family is trying really hard to spend a lot of time with Madison's Grandpa, in the hospital, with Lung Cancer.)
-i feel like I'm keeping the problem throughout the WHOLE story... do you?
-Madison fixes it, a couple years later, when Madison and Claire are both on Dance lines, and Performed their sister duet. "wow Madison! You did a very nice job up their with your sister!" says her family...
*DID YOU SEE THIS?*

his favorite color is ''BLOOD RED.''
5-24-10
beggining.
sounds:quiet,harsh,serious.
feels:mad,destructive,cautious,smart.

his favorite place is germany.
his favorite color is ''BLOOD RED.''
5-24-10
sounds:quiet,harsh,serious.
feels:mad,destructive,cautious,smart.
looks:pale,still,smart,prepared,vicious.

Keep going. I want to know more about Ichiro! Tell me everything!-Ms Schwieters
Where is your T chart from today? Your internal and external characteristics are very important for yor story.-Ms. Schwieters
External traits:
Black hair
Dark brown eyes
Short
Skinny
Internal traits:
Humble
Selfless
What Ichiro yearns for:
because the war
war has started, business trip.
What Ichiro looks like:
Short
Black hair
Dark brown eyes
Matted/Messy hair
Skinny
What Achiro feels like:
Ichiro feels very afraid and alone when he gets separated from his family
He feels sad and hopeless when he finds his grandparents dead
He feels tired and achy from running, and in pain from throwing up
What Ichiro sounds like:
He speaks Japanese and English
He has a high voice