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5-4-10 I think that I am going to write about my sister. the story will be about Lucy being baptized, and Camille's happiest day of her life, Lucy being born. But when people tell her that Lucy is growing up, Camille is so excited! They will share rooms together, and play together, and be best friends! But than Camille starts noticing that Lucy is growing up, and she is really sad. she will never crawl again like she used to, or she will never forget her first steps. but she does not want Lucy to grow up. And they don't ever want to be like her brothers...they fight a lot.

~Camille You certainly have a strong relationship with your sister. Keep thinking of ideas! Ms. Schwieters

Thanks! : )

5-18-10 Madison, who just tuned 8, tried out for a Dance line. When she found out that she made it, she didn't really know what they were like, or what you did at competitions. So when she goes to her 1st competition, all of her family is there. So Madison LOVED the attention she got, from her family cheering her on. So on the 2nd Competition, only her mom shows up to cheer for her, and she was kind of upset. Madison thought that competitions were all about cheering, and the attention (But their not). She was upset, because she was expecting more attention. So, a couple years later, when her little sister, Claire signs up for dance, she gets more attention than Madison does, when she Dances at her competitions. Now before Madison tried out for a competition Dance line, she would only perform her dances once a year. But for Competitions, you perform all of your Dances like, 10 different times, so it was a big leap for Madison. Madison gets very frustrated when her sister gets more attention than Madison does, when she performs. (Also, her family is trying really hard to spend a lot of time with Madison's Grandpa, in the hospital, with Lung Cancer.)
 * when we were doing our scenes today, you told me to kinda change the story. So I'm going to re-tell my summary, OK?...*

-i feel like I'm keeping the problem throughout the WHOLE story... do you? -Madison fixes it, a couple years later, when Madison and Claire are both on Dance lines, and Performed their sister duet. "wow Madison! You did a very nice job up their with your sister!" says her family... ~Camille

5-5-10 i wish that there were books about:

-Bullying-and how they stand up -sisters-if they like each other, or fight -people who are dealing with family that has cancer -girls who think that there is something wrong with them, even though everyone says theres nothing wrong with them. -people who don't have any friends -girls' friends who are friends with bullies (for example if you didn't get that) Amanda is Camille's friend and Amanda is friends with Camille's bully -people who don't make plays -families who don't have a job-more likely dad's-can't afford many things

I can see you are putting your experiences in these ideas. Writing about what you know and feel will make your story better.- Ms. Schwieters Thanks (Again!)

5-6-10

for example:

In Me and sailu's partner book, we read the book 'best friends and drama queens'. And it was about Allie, the main character, dealing with bullies. (who was a HUGE drama queen!) And Allie was trying to fit in, and be with the popular girls. But Chyenne (The bully) did some strange stuff. And so Allie was being left out, just because she wasn't with the popular girls. But of course, she would NEVER want to do that kind of stuff. And when Allie told the teacher, Allie was being left out even more! just because she was trying to stand up to Chyenne.

I am connecting to this, and I feel that maybe the author DID have this happen to her in 4th grade. MAYBE it was a RF book. (IDK, it might have been fiction) P.S. did i spell Chyenne right?...it keeps telling me that i spelled it wrong.

~Camille

Try to think of your own examples. Make sure to get your own twist in the ideas. -Ms. Schwieters Gracias!-what do you mean by, 'your own twists' in the idea?...

5-7-10

I'm going to see how much I can write about my grandpa having cancer. -Well, I remember him telling my mom on April fools day, and I thought it was just a joke. But my grandpa jokes a lot, so I got kind of scared. Because my grandma, (His wife) died 6 months after she found out that she had cancer. so I thought that my grandpa was going to die before my 11th birthday! I also remember my mom telling me that my grandpa was taking chemotherapy, and he was bald. I got SOOOO scared because I didn't want my grandpa to die. I haven't seen him in awhile, but I hope he's alright.

I am going to write as much as I can about my dad not having a job. -I have wanted a dog for... 5 years. My parents keep telling me the same thing... "No, honey. not until your dad finds out about his job."

~Camille Good start. Try listing feelings about not getting your dog, feeling sad about your dad not having a job. There is more going on and you can write about all of it.-Ms. Schwieters

5-9-10

Lucy Wynter (8), Michael Wynter(11), Madison Wynter (15), Jonathon (But we call him Johnny)Wynter (17), Ella Johnson(15). (Madison and Lucy's best friend)

Lucy (My character) has a younger sister, and she loves her very much. She really feels that there is something wrong with herself... not having any friends, having bully troubles, and people not being on her side. She also feels that, just because she's different than everybody else, they don't have the right to make fun of her. ~Camille

Push yourself. Talk about feelings! Background?-Ms. Schwieters Did I fix it?

5-11-10

__Insides__ -she is very shy -loves Dance -loves dogs-animals -loves her (younger) sister -misses her sister when she is at school -very independent -very happy (All the time) -HUGE imaginations -always depends on her older sister -likes attention -LOVES school -VERY neat & orginized -nice -afraid of many things -talkative -has differences than her friends -LOVES to read (And outside) -Lactoce intolorent (and outside) -a girl scout (And outside) -in choir (And outside) -LOVES to sing! (And outside)

__Outsides__ -doesn't care what she wears to school -very (Not) shy when she is with her sister...playing -very dark brown hair -mature for her age -very happy -looks like her sister -always depends on her sister -smiles alot -very sensitive -hazel eyes-brown\green -stylish -has freckles -very tall for her age -has long hair -can't stand up to bullies -LOVES school (Other than the fact that she gets bullied) -polite -apologetic -confident in herself -saying what she wants-not very good at -not very honest at TIMES -Mostly honest (90% of the time)

~Camille 5-14-10 (5-11 continued) -she has a doll for her treasure -she likes to wear skinny jeans -likes to try different hair styles for school -worries about __EVERYTHING!!!!!!!!__ -she likes... no, no ,no, no, LOVES to read!!! -her favorite meal is, dinner -she has an older brother, younger brother, and a younger sister. -her best friend's name is Ella

Great start. Keep going. It will help the reader know more about your character. Remember what Mrs. Comisar said about characters being to good to be true. What are her weaknesses?-Ms. Schwieters

5-24-10

-she starts feeling very frustrated with her family that they didn't tell Madison that her Grandpa had Cancer -she thinks to herself: "why does he HAVE to die?!" -she sees a movie in her head about: her Grandpa in the hospital, and he comes home (but he doesn't)
 * Madison is really worried if her Grandpa is going to die*

Madison, who just tuned 10 made her third Dance line. So when she goes to her 1st competition, all of her family is there. So Madison LOVED the attention she got, from her family cheering her on. So on the 2nd Competition, only her mom shows up to cheer for her, and she was kind of upset. Madison thought that competitions were all about cheering, and the attention (But their not). She was upset, because she was expecting more attention. So, that year, when her little sister, Claire signs up for dance, Claire gets more attention than Madison. Now before Madison tried out for a competition Dance line, she would only perform her dances once a year. But for Competitions, you perform all of your Dances like, 10 different times, so it was a big leap for Madison. Madison gets very frustrated when her sister gets more attention than Madison does, when she performs. (Also, her family is trying really hard to spend a lot of time with Madison's Grandpa, in the hospital, with Lung Cancer.)
 * 5-18-10
 * when we were doing our scenes today, you told me to kinda change the story. So I'm going to re-tell my summary, OK?...*

-i feel like I'm keeping the problem throughout the WHOLE story... do you? -Madison fixes it, a couple years later, when Madison and Claire are both on Dance lines, and Performed their sister duet. "wow Madison! You did a very nice job up their with your sister!" says her family...**

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